经历与感受
一、考情分析
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二、素材积累
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引出话题
1.没有人不努力就能成功，我也不例外。
No one can succeed without hard work, and I'm not an exception.
2.俗话说：“有志者，事竟成。”
The saying goes, “Where there is a will, there is way.”
3.生活充满了挑战，我们都必须在某些时候勇敢地面对困难。就我而言，我总是在困难面前克服障碍，成为更好的自己。
Life is full of challenges, and we all have to face difficulties bravely at some point. In my case, I have always managed to overcome obstacles and become a better self when facing difficulties.
4.生活就像爬山，在爬山的过程中，我们会遇到许多挑战。让我分享一个我在成长过程中曾经克服过的困难。
Life is like mountain climbing, during which there are many challenges getting in our way. Let me share one of the difficulties that I ever overcame on the journey of growth.
5.我去年的一次英语考试不及格，今天我仍然记忆犹新。
An English exam that I failed last year remains fresh in my memory today.
6.当我成长的时候，我所经历的一切都像钻石一样在我的脑海里闪闪发光。
Everything I have experienced shines like diamonds in my mind when I am growing up.
7.我仍然记得我为运动会做准备的日子。
I still remember the days when I was preparing for the sports meeting.
8.清晰的记忆不知不觉涌进了我的脑海。
The clear memory crowded into my mind unconsciously.
9.去年发生在我身上的事完全证明了这一点。
What happened to me last year definitely proved this.
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总结和表态
总结：In short / In conclusion / To sum up / In a word / All in all / In general / Generally speaking / Taking my experience into conclusion
1.回顾那些日子，我可以自豪地说，这些努力是值得的。因此，我们所有人都应该记住，有痛苦就有收获。
Looking back on those days, I can proudly say that it's worth the effort. As a result, all of us are supposed to remember there is gain when there is pain.
2.总结我的经验，只有当我们下定决心去实现我们的梦想，坚持战斗，我们才能赢得战斗。所以毫无疑问，有志者，事竟成。
Taking my experience into conclusion, only when we make up our mind to achieve our dreams and insist on fighting can we win the battle. So there is no doubt that where there is a will, there is a way.
3.如上所述，老师和朋友的鼓励给了我很多灵感和动力，我深深地感谢他们。
As I've shown above, encouragement from my teachers and friends has given me a lot of inspiration and motivation, and I am grateful to them deeply.
4.可见，鼓励的话使人充满活力和信心。虽然一年过去了，但正是他们温暖有力的话语给了我继续奋斗的动力。
It can be seen that encouraging words make people energetic and confidence. Although one year passed, it is their warm and powerful words that bring me energy to keep on fighting.
5.我从这次经历中学到的是，只有以积极的态度面对困难，我们才能成功地应对生活中面临的所有挑战。
What I have learned from this experience is that only with a positive attitude towards difficulties can we succeed in dealing with all the challenges we face in life.
三、写作指导
假设你是李华，学校上周五开展了为期一天的实践活动。你的笔友 Henry 对这次活动很感兴趣。请你结合以下提示，用英语给他写一封信，谈谈活动过程及你的感想。词数 80 左右。
注意事项：
1. 必须包含所有提示信息，可适当发挥，开头已给出，不计入总词数；
2. 意思清楚，表达通顺，行文连贯，书写规范；
3. 请勿在文中使用真实的姓名、校名和地名。
四、五步写作法——审列扩连查
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第一步 细审题 定要点
五审法：审主题、审人称、审文体、审时态、审要点
1）审人称：以第一人称为主
2）审时态：以一般过去时为主
3）审文体：应用文
4）审主题：介绍实践活动的经历和感受
5）审要点：
要点1：了解长征learn about the Long March（长征）
要点2：听红军故事listen to the stories of the Red Army
要点3：欣赏剪纸艺术enjoy paper cutting art
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第二步 分段落 列要点
首段 (Beginning)：引出本次实践活动（部分开头已给出）。
中间段 (Body)：按时间顺序，用一般过去时描述一天的实践活动。
结尾 (Ending)：升华感受。概述这次经历的感受。
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第三步 扩句子 精加工
首段
[过渡句] 引出经历
[一般句] Let me tell you something about it.
[高分句] I’m glad to share with you my activities. / It’s my pleasure to share with you my practical experience. (I’m glad to do... / It’s my pleasure to do...)
中间段
【经历一 与历史博物馆有关的经历】
[一般句] In the morning, we visited the History Museum and then we listened to the stories of the Red Army. They were so wonderful.
[高分句] In the morning, we visited the History Museum. We learned about the history of the Long March. Then we listened to the stories of the Red Army. They touched us greatly. (具体描述)
【经历二 与民俗文化中心有关的经历】
[一般句] In the afternoon, we went to the Folk Culture Center and enjoyed paper cutting art.
[高分句] ________________ (具体描述)
结尾：升华感受
[一般句] The tour reminds me to love our country and know more about traditional Chinese art.
[高分句] Thanks to this tour, we not only deepen our love for our country but also have a better understanding of traditional Chinese art!(not only…but also…)
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第四步 连句子 成短文
优秀范文
Dear Henry,
I’m glad that you’re interested in our school study tour last Friday. It’s my pleasure to share with you my experience.
In the morning, we visited the History Museum. We learned about the history of the Long March. Then we listened to the stories of the Red Army. They touched us greatly. After lunch, we went to the Folk Culture Center and we enjoyed paper cutting art. We also watched local opera performances. They are educational.
Thanks to this tour, we not only deepen our love for our country but also have a better understanding of traditional Chinese art!
参考译文
亲爱的亨利：
很高兴你对我们上周五的学校研学之旅感兴趣。我很乐意和你分享我的经历。
上午，我们参观了历史博物馆，了解了长征的历史，随后聆听了红军的故事。这些故事深深打动了我们。午餐后，我们前往民俗文化中心，欣赏了剪纸艺术，还观看了地方戏曲表演。这些活动都很有教育意义。
多亏了这次旅行，我们不仅加深了对祖国的热爱，也对中国传统艺术有了更深刻的理解！
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第五步 查全文 得高分
首先依次检查人称、时态是否正确，要点是否齐全；然后检查句型、单词拼写、标点是否正确。
五、实战演练
初三的学习生活宛如紧张刺激的马拉松比赛，总是充满挑战，在一些艰难时刻，是谁帮助了你？请以My Inspiring Story为标题写一篇不少于80词的英语短文，让我们一同分享在困境中汲取力量、砥砺奋进的故事，传递向上的青春正能量。
要求：
1. 讲述一个自己的故事；
2. 你的感悟；
3. 适当增加细节，行文连贯；
六、参考答案
[总体分析]
①题材：本文是一篇材料作文；
②时态：时态以“一般过去时”和“一般现在时”为主；
③提示：写作要点已给出，考生应注意不要遗漏提示，并适当添加细节，注意字母大小写以及标点符号。
[写作步骤]
第一步，介绍在一些艰难时刻，帮助自己的人是谁；
第二步，讲述一个自己的故事；
第三步，介绍自己的感悟。
[亮点词汇]
①not only…but also 不仅……而且
②struggle with… 与……斗争
③encourage sb. to do sth. 鼓励某人做某事
④give up 放弃
⑤move on 继续前进
⑥inspire sb. to do sth. 激励某人做某事
[高分句型]
①In some tough moments, it was my English teacher who helped me. (强调句)
②I will never forget the time when I was struggling with my English grades. (when引导定语从句)
③No matter how difficult the situation is, we should never give up and always move on. (no matter how引导让步状语从句)
优秀范文
My Inspiring Story
The journey of studying in the third year of junior high is like a thrilling marathon. In some tough moments, it was my English teacher who helped me. She not only taught me English but also taught me how to face adversity. I will never forget the time when I was struggling with my English grades. She encouraged me to keep practicing and never give up. With her help, I finally improved my English and gained confidence.
I learned that perseverance is the key to success. No matter how difficult the situation is, we should never give up and always move on. This experience has inspired me to face challenges in life with a positive attitude.
参考译文
我深受鼓舞的故事
初三的学习之旅就像一场激动人心的马拉松。在一些艰难时刻，是我的英语老师帮助了我。她不仅教我英语，还教会我如何面对逆境。我永远不会忘记那段为英语成绩而苦恼的时光 —— 她鼓励我坚持练习、永不言弃。在她的帮助下，我终于提高了英语水平，也重拾了信心。
从这件事中，我懂得了坚持是成功的关键。无论处境多艰难，我们都不应放弃，而要不断前行。这段经历激励着我以积极的态度面对生活中的挑战。